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Basic summary: There have been three people murdered in New York City, all of whom have no physical injuries or wounds, yet cause of death is blood loss. Serena Weller, a current college student, is all too familiar with these types of deaths and knows that she needs to take steps to find the vampire(s) behind it and stop them. Feedback: I'm specifically looking for feedback on my characters and their development (or anything that is unclear). Please correct any grammar that is off. I've tried to proofread, but...you know how it is. Also, please point out any flaws in the plot (anything illogical, unrealistic, too banal, etc).

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Please be gentle. Looking for feedback about theme and content.

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Luca’s Lament is a novel about two lifelong buddies, Tim O’Neill and Luca DiAngelo. For the most part, the story plays itself out in the Bronx’s Belmont neighborhood, also known as Little Italy. There, they first meet on the streets as young teens in the early decade of the Sixties - two very different personalities from two very different families. “La Famiglia”, too, is an essential element in the story. For Luca, it is the tie that binds, and for Tim, supports and assists, in both men’s attempts to achieve their versions of the American Dream. Yes, the Mob is alive and well in the plot, but not central to what most concerns the story - the meaning of friendship and loyalty, and sometimes, its heavy price. There is humor and laughter, as well, and of course, there is a woman, Alicia Almeida, an immigrant from Brazil. The syncopated beat and rhythm of her life sambas across the path of both men, intriguing the one and overwhelming the other. She arrives on our shores in search of her American Dream, much like those earlier generations who tramped through the corridors of Ellis Island. Unlike them, the flavors of Alicia's American Dream differ greatly, though the struggles and uncertainties of a new immigrant in a new world are much the same. Enjoy - R A Keen

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Battles of the Brokenhearted: The Life and Times of Quest City is a 180,000-word fantasy-adventure about a king trapped in a war with his son on the planet Spirita. To nullify his disadvantage, the king clones eleven humans from different walks of life by sampling their souls. He then raises them as his own children to become the mightiest heroes Spirita has ever seen. Later, the king returns the soul shavings and asks the humans to bring their entire selves into the conflict. In response, this motley crew of broken hearts struggles with memories of war and a sense of family that flourished in a place they never physically experienced. Yet, they also contend with each other and the reality of being ordinary people with antiheroic tendencies. But what ultimately hampers their reply to the king’s appeal is Quest City: a new metropolis that veils a dark heritage where mobsters keep city hall on puppet strings and the meaning of family is as blurred as the bullets that dictate the town’s policies

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This is a spoof of the career of a notorious fugitive and his mistress and of the attempts of the FBI to find them, and also of aspects of contemporary U.S. life such as our preoccupation with and ignorance of nutrition and exercise, and a banking industry that facilitates easy movement of proceeds from criminal activity. Although I hope it is funny, I changed the genre from humor to literary fiction because deeper meaning emerged in the first 18 chapters. I very much appreciated reviews on the first submission, hope this is improved, and welcome any and all suggestions.

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As a sequel to "When Two Trails Become One," Jessie finds herself caught up in a world of crime that she's unfamiliar with as she continues to search her heart as she searches for her long-lost love, Clayton. She finds good advice from her Native American friends and puts her life in jeopardy as she tries to clear her name when she is accused of murder.

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2nd in a series. **************** This is not a supernatural tale, but an attempt at police procedural in which lycanthropy is a mental condition - the plot centres more on the chaos caused by the werewolf sightings than the wolf itself. ********** plot: Something dark and hairy roams the steep parklands that flank the suburbs of Alcove. A mauled body is found in the crawlspace of an abandoned house. Young DC Cal Dion, recovering from car crash injuries and newly reinstated in his home office, is set upon a trail that zigzags between murky dangers, howlings in the night, peculiar coworkers, and an edgy romance.

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A small-town college community is turned upside down when an anthropologist on the national lecture circuit comes to town to dispel racial myths. PLEASE NOTE, especially previous reviewers: Based on some recent workshop feedback, I decided to change the book's POV from first to limited third since Min is a more private person and her reluctance to talk about herself tended to estrange her from the reader. Would you let me know if it works better in third? Also the opening pages have been heavily edited since last posting. Since it's nearly a new chapter, I'm posting it and in fact the rest of the chapters as new ones rather than reposts. Thanks to all my earlier reviewers since I expect they'll disappear posting this as new content. I printed them out and filed them in a notebook. Chapters 85-96 are the chapters written in first-person POV. No need to read those unless you are interesting in comparing the effectiveness of the new choice.

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This is an overly ambitious, schizophrenic hodgepodge of metaphysical philosophy and gutter humor centered around some two-bit gangsters and the women who love them...Have fun.

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In his struggle to save his company, a young chief executive ends up fighting to save his life. This near future tale addresses the key elements of what constitute real power in society, loyalty and honour as opposed to money and violence. ************* I am looking for feedback on individual chapters, especially ones that haven't received any reviews. On things like grammer, structure, character and dialogue, as well as an indication of where the chapter stands on the boring barometre. (Revised Title; 16/02/08)

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Lost and Found is the story of Kirby Truman, pseudo-bounty hunter/missing person specialist, and his search for the victim of an online killing club. Added chapter 1 and a revised chapter 2.

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My first crack at Science Fiction. However, it is written, step by step, to appear completely logical with no aliens, monsters, apparitions, etc. Since it concerns time travel, I've been advised that it would definitely be set in the Science Fiction genre. Check out the tags for the variety in the plotting.

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When Detective Theodore Gill discovers a serial killer has breeched the small town of Chelsea, Michigan he realizes quickly that the investigation will be the hardest case he’s ever worked. Bizarre and strange things are happening to the victim’s bodies after they are murdered, and evidence simply vanishes. Mandy Steven’s has been assigned to work with Gill on the case, and together they are led down the dark path of deceit, as the man responsible for the murders taunts them, with trickery, and sometimes a treat, and before long the two of them become a part of the killer’s charade. When their world suddenly advances several months into the future over night, Mandy and Gill realize it is only a matter of time, before they too fall victims, to the dark man’s magic, and suddenly they become trapped in a game of cat and mouse when Tessa Johnson, and several of their co-workers disappear. When their investigation leads them to an old cemetery, Gill and Mandy find themselves trying to piece the clues together, about the black cats, the deserted cemetery building, and the wild bats, that the dark man is leaving behind. Soon the two of them realize, the dark man is much too powerful, and every lead they investigate, brings them closer to their own demise. What Gill and Mandy know is it is only a matter of time, before the dark man catches the two of them, and decides who’s going to live or die, and when it’s time for a: TRICKERY TREAT

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Time for another installment...I had so much fun the first time around.

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THANKS TO ALL THE INPUT I RECEIVED THE LAST TIME I POSTED THIS, I HAVE SPENT SIX MONTHS RE-EDITING AND TAKEN WHAT WAS A 200,000 WORD NOVEL DOWN TO A 113,000 WORD NOVEL. YOU WERE ALL CORRECT, IT WAS WAY TOO LONG. ANYWAY, HERE WE GO AGAIN:- Redemption Don’t Come Cheap opens in Brooklyn in 1964, after three nine-year-old boys from diverse backgrounds view the movie Goldfinger for the twentieth time. Later they see absolutely no problem in emulating Mr. Bond’s movie and painting the eighteen-month-old sister of one of the boys, bright red from neck to toes. The baby survives in good humor and for two of the boys, the repercussions of their punishment are maybe just, for the third it is simply tragic. The aftermath rips their friendship apart, throws their lives onto very different courses and the boys ultimately grow to distrust and dislike each other. They barely talk for thirty years; until a break-in at a local pet store, a strange twist of fate and a series of letters from the grave finally start to work, and all three men are inexplicably drawn back to the scene of the ‘baby painting,’ simultaneously. Once they meet again, they face up to old truths, reveal multiple secrets and nothing is ever what it seems for very long. When a brand new shared predicament makes it clear at least one of them needs to be a scapegoat and die, they begin a fight for personal survival. Their epic story involves multiple pet thefts from a local Mafia boss, a language-challenged priest who pays dearly for insulting the pope, a drunken monkey with a very bad attitude, an international diplomatic incident, the repeated theft of some very unlucky diamonds, abduction, subtle deceit, public humiliation, bare-faced lying, cheating, murder in abandon, accidental serial pet-o-cide, a trip through the Twilight Zone and finally, for one of them, personal redemption.

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Frankie planned the perfect kidnapping, or did he?

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Someone is murdering the good people of Greenfield, and there’s talk of a serial killer on the loose. Finding him should be an easy task for a guy with super-powers: too bad he falls out of the sky. If Marshall Jamrozik has any hope of ending the killing spree, he’ll need a little help from a morbidly obese shop keeper who just happens to be a witch, and a hard drinking senior citizen with a penchant for lifting heavy objects... like automobiles. Corrupt cops, Ogres, thirty six-year-old Siamese cats, and of course, the Netherworld. All in a day’s work when you’re trying to save a city from a baneful and simmering evil that’s about to be unleashed.

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The Hard Cold Kiss Goodbye is flash fiction in form, but this has a twist: it will comprise a number of self-contained "images" (or scenes, if you prefer). The reader is invited to assemble the final number of "images" into a narrative string that you find pleasing. In this way, you become the producer of your own experience of The Hard Cold Kiss Goodbye.

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The Hard Cold Kiss Goodbye is flash fiction in form, but this has a twist: it will comprise a number of self-contained "images" (or scenes, if you prefer). The reader is invited to assemble the final number of "images" into a narrative string that you find pleasing. In this way, you become the producer of your own experience of The Hard Cold Kiss Goodbye.

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Data dealer Black Lucas is given an offer he can't refuse. Recover the lost data herds of Korean crime warlord, Kim Sung, or wind up dead in seven days. He is joined by data jackal Mambo Ahmed in a desperate race against time in their search for legendary console cowboy Hot Zephyr. Along the way they must confront the mysterious Stemper Tashfin.

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I have re-hashed this over and over and incorporated all the latest terrific reviews and suggestions into it. Please tell me if I've gotten it right this time :( BTW The spelling is the Australian version of English! We use s's instead of z's LOL

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Hotshot Sydney detective Max Beckett wakes up in a seedy hotel room with two dead bodies, and police hammering at the door. He flees the scene and sets in train a series of events that plunges him into the twisted worlds of a deranged serial killer, Russian mobsters and a band of terrorists preparing to launch an unprecedented attack on Australian soil. Only Max and a sexy Russian intelligence officer can save the day in this desperate race against time. A rollicking good read that adds the name of Max Beckett to the pantheon of crime noir heroes.

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A boy witnesses an unspeakable horror--the senseless killing of a childhood friend. His mother's in a rehabilitation center; his brother's a bully. Is there no one to help him through his grief? (This is the novel I'm writing for NaNoWriMo.)

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