Jake Leg Paralysis

I know, 3,500 words. I think it may be a little too long. How does this flow? Do I linger too much on the delicious details? Jake paralysis is a real medical condition, as a cursory google will prove. Would footnotes and citations help or hinder this piece? I am looking for a snappy title. I have already made a few minor word changes since posting this piece, but any suggestions are welcome.

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